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Flash fiction!

Drive of Dragons, Verity, Sigune
I participated in Jessa Russo's Flash Factory Friday, here. This is my entry - anyone else who wants to, please feel free to take part! You can post entries through the end of the day.

The fountain had grown enormous, but Joanna wasn’t daunted. She was thirsty. She leapt to the rim and drank, the water cool in her throat. Then she listened. Someone was calling her – someone she knew. His voice sounded buzzy, like static on a phone line. Ordinarily the harsh tone would have annoyed her, but just now she found it strangely attractive. “Sam?” she said aloud, and darted toward the voice,Read more... )

Six sentence Sunday (#6?)

Drive of Dragons, Verity, Sigune
Here are a few more from my WIP, A Drive of Dragons. We're getting near the end!

She imagined Silver giving people rides. She would go first, to show everyone that it was safe. She pictured the palace roofs below her feet as Silver soared above them. Everyone would be waving and pointing, and she would have a view of the entire courtyard and the farms and fields beyond. Birds would fly under their feet. Smiling, Verity felt herself tilting a bit as if Silver were starting to turn. The next moment, she was asleep.

Bicycle Safety - a rant

Drive of Dragons, Verity, Sigune
Okay - I am also going to try for one more six sentence Sunday, if I have time. But first, I am going to express a little puzzlement and confusion. I have been so baffled by what I've seen a couple of bicyclists do recently that I actually went and looked up the traffic laws to see if what I remembered was right. Read more... )

On Power and its uses-

Drive of Dragons, Verity, Sigune
A review of Kristin Cashore's Bitterblue

"Power corrupts. Absolute power corrupts absolutely." Joshua, quoting (possibly misquoting?) in Madeleine L'Engle's The Arm of the Starfish

Is that true? It certainly seems to be; there is a lot of cruelty and corruption in the world - and also in Cashore's fictional world. Bitterblue, the young girl rescued by Katsa and Po in Graceling, is now 18, and a queen.Read more... )

New first chapter-

kiril sword
Hi, everyone! Here is the revised first chapter of HONOR, which I'm posting at my lovely beta readers' urging. Thanks, Deirdrej and Anne_Arthur! I do think it's much better than it was before the rewrites.

Read more... )

Another poll question - Alien Cameras!

sword, cover, Deirdre, honor, kiril
My sister and I are having a bit of a debate. She hates the word "holocam", which sounds, to her, too much like something from Star Trek I rather like it. At least it makes clear that it's a camera, and from the future. But what do you think? Should I change this word? If so, to what?
Poll #1836699 Alien cameras
Open to: All, detailed results viewable to: All, participants: 6

What should I call an alien video camera?

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Holocam is fine. After all, everyone knows what it means.
6 (100.0%)
Electric scribe
0 (0.0%)
memory keeper
0 (0.0%)
Some alien word like ahnkat
0 (0.0%)
Something else, which I'll suggest in the comments
0 (0.0%)

Naming an alien city-

Drive of Dragons, Verity, Sigune
Poll #1835299 Naming an alien city?
Open to: All, detailed results viewable to: All, participants: 4

So - I am continuing my edits, but there are a few small things I really think I should change. For one thing, I think the city name "Newport" sounds too pedestrian for the Telaka Capitol. What should I call it instead? TIA for any responses and suggestions!

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Emperor's Landing
1 (33.3%)
Deep Harbor
1 (33.3%)
First city, or something like that
1 (33.3%)
Some alien-sounding name
0 (0.0%)
Something else, which I'll suggest in the comments
0 (0.0%)

If I choose an alien place name (struggling with these!) what sounds good?

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Enek's city (perhaps as something like Adanek?)
0 (0.0%)
Heck, Adanek! I think I like that one!
1 (25.0%)
Kassin
2 (50.0%)
Alit mouth (for the river Alit, a name like Weymouth)
1 (25.0%)
I'm open to suggestions!
0 (0.0%)

Six sentence Sunday - a change of pace-

girl, library, books, Niki
I have, as some of you know, two WIPs going at once. HONOR is (I truly think) nearing completion, after several rewrites. I need to do a little more trimming and revising of the latter third, and this is where these come from.

As they left the sickbay, a tall man scowled and muttered something, and Kiril shoved Kennet behind him and reached for the knife at his belt - but it was gone. “Kiril?” Kennet whispered.

“It’s all right,” Kiril answered, and tried to make himself believe it, so that Kennet would, as well. But he could feel himself shaking. How could he protect his brother and cousin, weaponless and surrounded by enemies? Then Donahue stepped forward.


I'd love to know what those (few) who know the story think of that! I think it helps, as far as it goes. And - okay. Just a touch more from the dragons:

I must say, it’s rather hard to read. Look,” and lady Ash held the book out to Verity. “Can you make it out at all?”

Verity peered at the open page in front of her and then laughed. “Her writing was awfully scraggly, wasn’t it? Worse than father’s. I think it says something about combing sulfur?”

Daffodils for Easter!

bluey

daffodils, Litchfield
Originally uploaded by maryj59

Here is a pic of a farm near my Dad's house - and all the flowers have been in bloom for awhile now! Happy Easter to all who celebrate!
And happy Passover, too, to those who celebrate that holiday. Uri Avnery, the renowned Israeli peace activist, has a fascinating post on the Haggadah here

I think the thing to remember is that these holidays are about love, forgiveness, and freedom. Let's all cast out fear and hatred and remember that our life in this world is a blessing.

End of sermon from me! Happy holidays. :)

Possible entry for the Bulwer-Lytton contest?

Drive of Dragons, Verity, Sigune
While browsing another thread, I came across this entry, and wondered how on earth I'd failed to cross-post it here. What do you think? Should I enter the contest?

Frieda, the scrawny, downtrodden serving wench, wiped her nose with the back of her hand and gaped at the vision of beauty that had stopped in the doorway: a knight, his eyes flashing like coals, his hair the gold of new-drawn ale, and his armor shining like the sun upon rising.

mary

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